The story is shaping up, the first part of the video has been roughly story boarded and part two is written. Almost done writing, and I should be all set for the group critique next Monday!
And with those good notes, I leave with this.
Made from boredom last night:
Comments from small crit #1:
ReplyDeleteretelling of slenderman's origin story. internet horror story. how he made it into our world. shows differences between our world and their world. he needs physical contact to enter our world. in our world, he is represented by a black shadow with flames. 5 part series? 5 part narrative? Montage! How are we going to see the connection of the real cultural history of this meme and his interpretation of the origin story? There needs to be visuals which express the horror of the slenderman getting to our world. Much of the story/plot is ambiguous on purpose; even in abstract narratives you have to be careful of contradictions in the world you have created. REALLY large breadth for his project: is he going to be able to complete it? contain white fire aura to be smaller around the body and more controlled. He has a good start to the tests, but we still have too many questions about the visual nature of the other world and how slenderman will be represented in our world: he needs more dream/real world effects. Animatic? Storyboard? quicker explanation?
script + renders; origin story for Slenderman; few shots around Wolfe Center, cut to his world, needs physical contact to make it in both worlds - touches a wall in Wolfe, but doesn't work totally (effects of breaking through) - has aura of flames in own world, but in our world as a shadow; part 2: he's trying to come into our world, but a human walks through his aura and he looks at them - person freezes, slenderman tilts his head; part 3: montage of his attempts to come into our world and humans reacting (fx shots) - bottle of water shaking with ink filling, furniture and person undos themselves, walk explosion reverses itself; part 4: person wakes up on couch, sweating, disoriented, under slenderman's spell. standing in full view of our world and forces arm through chest, no entry, but see flames - he pulls arm out and human collapses, dies, goes into slenderman world; part 5) slenderman comes back into our world, emerging through flames. Vis test #1 - flames going up hands (looks good) - will be outward to inward; test #2 aura - needs to be more contained (looks too much like white flame); test #3 - clouds moving fast, no smoke - maybe best so far (his world) - same world different dimension; For crit - try to get storyboard / animatic done + slenderman in the shot.
Progress: A-, Concept: B